Thursday, April 13, 2006

Hook, Line and Stinker

"I am out of change", pleaded our protagonist and decided to disembark ten miles before his stop. The driver gave little of the sympathy he himself got and got ready to close the doors
like everyone did on him. "Here, take this", cooed our mellifluous heroine. Quarters quivered in her hand like the smile on her lips. Gladly, he paid the driver. And then repaid, with a frown for the driver and a smile for the girl, followed by a solemn promise to return the money. She smiled again and fell on him as the driver braked hard, perhaps in revenge? To pay his first installment, he turned on the charm offensive. Blushing, smiling, entrenched: the girl seemed to have given her heart for a few quarters. Ten miles came too soon. He got off the bus waving his hand at our exiting heroine. She gave him a smile that made his heart skip. He smiled and looked again at the paper with her number. And then, she made his heart skip again. Twice in two seconds. His hands fumbled as he searched his pockets for his missing wallet.

10 comments:

Nocturne said...

good one!
nit: hands "fumbled" perhaps?

Parth said...

Thank you and good catch :-) Post updated duly

aparna said...

:D

Yeah, knew there was a twist coming. Bollywood in Seattle perhaps? :P

And your word-verificatiob says - 'ghuumla'! :-O

sd said...

Great! The famous Parth twist was expected - but it was as unexpected as ever:)

shreya said...

hehe!

frissko said...

cool one!..first time here...(u seem to be as famous as O.Henry around here..)

Avinash said...

Nice one parth

RS said...

*grin* Me likes :)

30in2005 said...

good one.

I see how difficult it it to get on your blogroll....

shreya said...

Parth: You asked about the structure of haikus...well, you read right, it should be 5-7-5. But I also read that this rule is relaxed in English writing (english being what it is)...though I guess it depends on whether you're a purist or not!

I was pretty disatisfied with mine, but thanks a mill for the compliments!